Creative writing By Alatyr. 18/10/09, 01:29 pm |
| Did some creative writing for English, so i figured i'd post it on here
Warning: It's quite gory. 12 year old mafia turn back here.
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The cell felt like it was closing in on him, the dark concrete walls staring at him with their blank faces. Voices talking, Whispering, chiding. He hugged his legs close to his chest and rocked backwards and forwards. The ghosts of his old life danced before his eyes. It brought back memories, memories that were best left buried inside the dark recesses of his deluded mind…
The blood ran slowly down the wicked blade. He had been staring at it for some time now, and the crimson liquid was starting to congeal on the once-bright steel. Adrenaline pumped through his veins, back through his arteries and into his rapidly beating heart. She had screamed, oh how she had screamed. He had silenced her with relish.
He crouched down beside the twisted form that had been his wife. He examined the wounds he had happily inflicted upon her. Thirteen stabs straight to the neck, an unlucky number for some, but in his mind, quite the opposite. The amount of blood that had poured out of her mangled neck had been incredible. His mind reeled with the realisation that he had actually killed someone. And he had enjoyed it.
Hands quivering he stood and snapped his head back. He laughed. He laughed because no longer would he endure her snide comments, her frequent threats and her endless drinking. He stopped laughing abruptly and looked down in disgust at the woman who used to be his wife. He spat on the corpse and stalked away, back into the inner city.
He walked purposefully through the dark streets. People backed away from the shadowy, blood-stained figure that held a knife in his hand, and a mad glint in his eye. He burst into an information centre and a few minutes later, the police station received a call from an extremely distressed woman claiming to have seen a man saturated in blood asking for directions.
Blue and red flashing light’s reached his eyes and he grinned. The police cars screeched to a halt in front of him and four of the cities law enforcers jumped out with guns raised. “Drop the weapon!” yelled one. The knife clattered to the pavement. “Get on the floor with your hands behind your head!” The blood-soaked man leered at the police and began laughing. He slowly dropped to his knees and then his stomach, all the while laughing a crazy, maniacal laugh.
And so here he sat in the corner of his cold, dark cell. His neck twitched, his head snapping back. His eyes rolled. It all became too much. He brought his filthy wrist to his mouth and bit down hard. Blood welled in the vicious marks and began falling to the floor. Quickly taking as much as he could in his hand, he daubed on the wall his last message to the world. He then lay down on the cold floor, and waited for deaths sweet embrace. He stared up at the bright red message as his vision dimmed.
“IT WAS WORTH IT”.
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| Alatyr Tophat
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Re: Creative writing By mystix-candy. 18/10/09, 01:32 pm |
| If you don't get an excellence for this~ tell your teacher the protagonist will come and do the same to her/him~
12 year old mafia best turn back here, hm. ...it might give them ideas. |
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Re: Creative writing By PIe. 18/10/09, 01:37 pm |
| That's amazing, very descriptive and a tad disturbing, I like it |
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Re: Creative writing By Guest. 18/10/09, 02:48 pm |
| I love it, you did a real good job ham ham~ |
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Re: Creative writing By Jaykob. 22/10/09, 11:45 am |
| Sorry about this post. Brother is always logged on damn it >.<
Last edited by Jaykob on 22/10/09, 12:05 pm; edited 2 times in total |
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Re: Creative writing By mystix-candy. 22/10/09, 11:47 am |
| Merit's good ! 8D Well done~ |
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Re: Creative writing By PIe. 22/10/09, 11:52 am |
| *personally thought it deserved more than a merit as hers was nowhere near as good as that and was done literally in 20mins as she procrastinated doing fanfiction and got excellence in lvl 2* |
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Re: Creative writing By Alatyr. 22/10/09, 12:08 pm |
| I'm very happy with merit, but also very happy you think it was that good. I enjoy writing horror st00f. GET'S OUT ALL THE ANGER. I mean what? |
| Alatyr Tophat
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Re: Creative writing By Guest. 23/10/09, 12:56 pm |
| Yea no you did a really good job keep up the good work |
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