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Post By Lowkey. 03/03/11, 01:12 am

Hi; I'm Ithurial and I haven't written anything for two days. Applause, please.

I write ... quite a lot (usually upwards of 2k words a day between play-by-post-roleplay and my creative writing degree fhkjhfkhsf 1000 words a day on my novel dhdhdkfjhd) but I very rarely finish anything concrete; I have nothing that I can print off and hand to someone in response to "oh, you write? Can i read some?" which while it doesn't happen very often, to be fair, you have to be prepared. I wrote this (and maybe another 1000 words I deleted because I didn't like them) a month or two ago and while I enjoy it in that if nothing else it's a departure from what & how I normally write, I don't know how much I like it.

Is it worth continuing? Is the style readable? There's some swearwords that'll get censored and I don't know how borderline some of the content is, but ping me and I can censor it out. Would love to hear, if nothing else, whereabouts in the text you had a "aha" moment re: the characters.


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Post By Guest. 03/03/11, 06:15 am

ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.
Very, VERY nice.

I like the tone, I LOVE how it's Mad Max to start and then slowly drip-feed the fact there are vampires into it. Very nice.
I love how sexy it is.

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Post By Lowkey. 07/07/11, 02:03 pm

So this is finally finished and up at my blog, lonewolfrayetstar. So is one other story. I'm theoretically going to write one and a half every week for the next eight or ten weeks.

I would kill for honest critique. And love challenges/prompts.
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Post By firecat70. 08/07/11, 07:06 am

One thing I would recomened would be to watch the length of your sentances. You seem to have a short, to the point style and the long length of your sentances don't really match it.
I like story though!
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